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#1cheesebuds · 10-28-2009, 07:16 AM

wow D. that was great. I might write some more in the future.

Owl Mirror · 10-28-2009, 07:21 AM

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Originally Posted by #1cheesebuds

anyone else have any thoughts.

You may enjoy this writers forum @ https://www.gather.com/

hyposomniac · 10-28-2009, 07:34 AM

This thread is an assault on the English language.

happyherb · 10-28-2009, 08:19 AM

i agree with Green Bastard.
it hurt my eyes as if filled with mustard

i stopped at line two
you now know what to do

put some spaces in some places
for all the frowning faces

that tried to read
but found indeed

the poem wasn't flowing
like a river that stopped going.
*************************
(i got bored sooooooo...)

there was a young man from kentucky
that meet an asian girl that liked to fucky

69's was no good

her mouth hurt from his wood

so he stuck it in her bum...

just cause he could!!!

MarquisBlack · 10-28-2009, 08:23 AM

LMFAO. Best thread ever.

TheGreenBastard · 10-28-2009, 08:56 AM

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Originally Posted by hyposomniac

This thread is an assault on the English language.

Why don't you write a few stanzas? Please, grace us with your voluminous lexicon and impeccable grammar.

May I ask your profession? Let me guess, are you a linguist? No... a writer, Ph. D, maybe your just a pretentious ass?

ROJO145 · 10-28-2009, 10:26 AM

There once was a man from Nantucket,whos dick was so long he could suck it.He said with a grin as he wiped off his chin,if my ear was a **** I could fuck it.
I know lots of poems,gettin cold here in Nantucket so I write poems at nite

Owl Mirror · 10-28-2009, 06:32 PM

America ~ land of the Free, home of the Brave

Out of many, one nation was formed

The best of ideals, the best of intentions

Freedom for all, governed by the people, for the people

We gathered together on this distant shore, a cornucopia of races and creeds

All striving for a better world for our children and generations to come

A patchwork of ideas woven into one desire, yearning to be free from oppression

Our Nation has undergone birth pangs to be sure, civil war, social unrest

We shall soon celebrate our 232nd year of Independence as a nation

Difference of opinions abound yet, we have the freedom of expression

We must heal the partisan divide which has crept into governance

For a house divided, shall not stand

Black and White, Red, Yellow and Brown all yearning for common ground

Our founding document was flawed and incomplete, a work in progress

It made plain all men were created equal yet, slavery and occupation coexisted

Through all these trials, we as a people have overcome these discrepancies

Slowly, sometimes painfully we matured as a nation

America, land of the Free, home of the Brave, less a statement, more of a promise

Our work is still incomplete, contradictions are still replete

A wealthy nation yet so many poor are left behind, waiting for their turn to arrive

A product unfinished should not be exported to foreign markets

We have much to be proud of, great accomplishments have we achieved

We can ill afford to rest on our laurels', complacent and proud

It is the duty of each generation to vouchsafe our freedoms, lest we lose them

For if we take our freedoms for granted, as if guaranteed by inheritance

We shall fall victim to arrogance and misplaced pride

For far too long our nations youth have been neglected being taught civics

How many of this generation and the next have studied the Constitution, the Bill of Rights

How many of this generation and the next harbor civic pride and responsibility

We lay claim to being a nation United yet, we've become fractured and divided

Our common goal has become less national and more individual

I believe this is due to our Government becoming more Capitalistic than Democratic

Capitalism and a desire for soft living has fractured our society into the Haves and have-nots

While Capitalism is a good model for economic well-being, it is not beneficial for governance

When you gather together this Independence Day with family and friends

I ask each of you, to reflect on what it means to be an American.

Amidst the hotdogs and apple pie, place a copy of the Declaration of Independence The Constitution of these United States and the Bill of Rights.

Take a few moments with family and friends to reflect upon this legacy you've been handed

For if you celebrate our Independence absent understanding, what have you gained

If you neglect this civic responsibility and rely upon ours to shoulder the burden

You risk losing your voice on the direction your nation follows

In a Democracy, your silence gives others permission to chart your destiny for you

Are you willing to simply be a passenger on this great voyage or, a crewmember?

Celebrate America's great achievements but, do not be blinded to her transgressions

For to lose sight of past misdeeds and misguided foibles is akin to navigating a ship by the brightness of the Sun.

You risk being blinded by passions and ambitions, you risk running this mighty ship upon the rocks of adversity, just shy of the shores of the Promised Land.

hyposomniac · 10-28-2009, 10:15 PM

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Originally Posted by TheGreenBastard

Why don't you write a few stanzas? Please, grace us with your voluminous lexicon and impeccable grammar.

May I ask your profession? Let me guess, are you a linguist? No... a writer, Ph. D, maybe your just a pretentious ass?

I'm just a monkey with a room full of typewriters.
It was the best of times, it was the blurst of times...

Pretentious ass? Fair enough, under the circumstances.

I think that scribbling down your feelings when you're sad with no regard for the most fundamental rules of the language, and then trying to elevate it to the level of art by calling it poetry is also a bit pretentious. It's also offensive to the reader, and anyone who knows the level of hard work and discipline involved in real writing.

Would you rather I was dishonest and said it was good? Or even remotely readable?

disfunktional · 10-29-2009, 03:03 AM

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Originally Posted by hyposomniac

I'm just a monkey with a room full of typewriters.
It was the best of times, it was the blurst of times...

Pretentious ass? Fair enough, under the circumstances.

I think that scribbling down your feelings when you're sad with no regard for the most fundamental rules of the language, and then trying to elevate it to the level of art by calling it poetry is also a bit pretentious. It's also offensive to the reader, and anyone who knows the level of hard work and discipline involved in real writing.

Would you rather I was dishonest and said it was good? Or even remotely readable?

yo man art is in the eye of the beholder. what is art to some may not be art to another. so if you you dont think what you see is art then feel free to leave the thread we arent forceing you to stay and read. and who needs the negativity? i think that theres already enough in this world. peace

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happyherb no wuckin furries! Join Date: Sep 2004 Posts: 2,042	i agree with Green Bastard. it hurt my eyes as if filled with mustard i stopped at line two you now know what to do put some spaces in some places for all the frowning faces that tried to read but found indeed the poem wasn't flowing like a river that stopped going. ************************* (i got bored sooooooo...) there was a young man from kentucky that meet an asian girl that liked to fucky 69's was no good her mouth hurt from his wood so he stuck it in her bum... just cause he could!!! __________________ ....yea i think i'll have the fresh marijuana salad.
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ROJO145 Banned Join Date: Dec 2008 Location: On the Hill Posts: 1,554	There once was a man from Nantucket,whos dick was so long he could suck it.He said with a grin as he wiped off his chin,if my ear was a **** I could fuck it. I know lots of poems,gettin cold here in Nantucket so I write poems at nite
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Owl Mirror Seed Splitter Join Date: Jan 2005 Posts: 1,342	America ~ land of the Free, home of the Brave Out of many, one nation was formed The best of ideals, the best of intentions Freedom for all, governed by the people, for the people We gathered together on this distant shore, a cornucopia of races and creeds All striving for a better world for our children and generations to come A patchwork of ideas woven into one desire, yearning to be free from oppression Our Nation has undergone birth pangs to be sure, civil war, social unrest We shall soon celebrate our 232nd year of Independence as a nation Difference of opinions abound yet, we have the freedom of expression We must heal the partisan divide which has crept into governance For a house divided, shall not stand Black and White, Red, Yellow and Brown all yearning for common ground Our founding document was flawed and incomplete, a work in progress It made plain all men were created equal yet, slavery and occupation coexisted Through all these trials, we as a people have overcome these discrepancies Slowly, sometimes painfully we matured as a nation America, land of the Free, home of the Brave, less a statement, more of a promise Our work is still incomplete, contradictions are still replete A wealthy nation yet so many poor are left behind, waiting for their turn to arrive A product unfinished should not be exported to foreign markets We have much to be proud of, great accomplishments have we achieved We can ill afford to rest on our laurels', complacent and proud It is the duty of each generation to vouchsafe our freedoms, lest we lose them For if we take our freedoms for granted, as if guaranteed by inheritance We shall fall victim to arrogance and misplaced pride For far too long our nations youth have been neglected being taught civics How many of this generation and the next have studied the Constitution, the Bill of Rights How many of this generation and the next harbor civic pride and responsibility We lay claim to being a nation United yet, we've become fractured and divided Our common goal has become less national and more individual I believe this is due to our Government becoming more Capitalistic than Democratic Capitalism and a desire for soft living has fractured our society into the Haves and have-nots While Capitalism is a good model for economic well-being, it is not beneficial for governance When you gather together this Independence Day with family and friends I ask each of you, to reflect on what it means to be an American. Amidst the hotdogs and apple pie, place a copy of the Declaration of Independence The Constitution of these United States and the Bill of Rights. Take a few moments with family and friends to reflect upon this legacy you've been handed For if you celebrate our Independence absent understanding, what have you gained If you neglect this civic responsibility and rely upon ours to shoulder the burden You risk losing your voice on the direction your nation follows In a Democracy, your silence gives others permission to chart your destiny for you Are you willing to simply be a passenger on this great voyage or, a crewmember? Celebrate America's great achievements but, do not be blinded to her transgressions For to lose sight of past misdeeds and misguided foibles is akin to navigating a ship by the brightness of the Sun. You risk being blinded by passions and ambitions, you risk running this mighty ship upon the rocks of adversity, just shy of the shores of the Promised Land.
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