[#1cheesebuds]

I wanted to post my poetry some where but couldn't find a place to do that. so here it goes.
this is just one of the many I have writen over the past 5 years.

this came straight from my wicked mind. hope yall like it. and if not then thats cool also.

I love to write strange and wicked poetry.
back in highschool it got me in trouble a lot.

The story from hell and back.

Ok so u wake up on the ground floor of the desert and U get up and start walking all around dazed and confused when suddenly u look around and see miles and miles of open earth holes like the ones in ur brain from going in sane. then u see a wall of fire comming ur way. so u run like hell. and u fall into 1 of thouse earth holes. and u find an underground tunnel so u run quickly to get away from the wall of water u thought u just saw. but ur not sure if it was a wall of fire or a sandstorm cummin ur way. so u keep running then blamm u suddenly r knocked the fuck out cold. and 20 minuts go by and u finily r awaken by the sound of a huge rat the size of a cat. so u get up and start running off down the tunnel. then u see an opening to a huge cave and u head over to it. then u realize that its full of bats. well off in the distance u kinda see an opening so u go there and squeeze ur body through it. and once u r out of the cave u say I need to rest for a bit. but then U r startled by the sounds of thousands of big bats flying right ur way. so u get up and run to hide behind a big rock. they fly off and away.
then u start to think where the hell am I and how did I endup in the fucking desirt of all places. now ur hungry as a fat dog. but u feel week and tired from funning ur ass off to get away from terror that lives in the desert. then u deside to keep on trucken but ur so dam hot u cant hardly move at all and ur sweeting so hard thet ur eyes r burning. so u wipe them wit ur tshirt. then u finly get the nurve to get up and go looken for food but 2 hours go bu and u'v found nothing at all. then u rember that some of the catus is edible but for got which ones thouse R. so u take a chance. u cut some open wit ur pocket knif and start eating. at first u feel super great to finily have some food like stuff in ur belly.
then around 30-1 hour later u start feeling really really weird. u start to see things like a lake of cristaly clear water. so u get up and start funning/walking over to find it. but when u get there its no where in sight. then about after an 1 1/2 hours u really start tripping hard so u deside to lay down on da ground to rest ur eyes and body fo a bit. so 2 hours go by then u awake and sit up agenst a rock rub ur eyes. u notest that u finily feel lots better so u deside to take out or pock knif and carve ur name and date into the rock just for the hell of it.
so u get up and start walking off to try and find ur way the hell out of this dam place but all u can see un frount of u is miles of wastland. then 6 of the most hotest hours of the day go by. then u think u see a plane on the ground off in the distance. but u r very very sceptical by this point. but u keep heading over to see if its really there and to ur suprise it is really there and there is a guy sitting over on a rock having a smoke. u run over there to see if he can give u a life the hell out of there. he takes one look at u and says u look like u been through hell an back.
U say I have seen every thing from fire to walls of water to bats and every thing inbetween. he says U didn't eat any of the wild catus round here did u? u like yes why do u ask? he says u could have died if u had eaten any of the bad ones. he says u got lucky.
lets go if u want out of here u say dam straight lets go and never come back to this hell hole.
so when u get home ur mother says where the hell have u been sun. u reply to hell and back in the desert. u like it all started when I got invited to a rave out west. there was gunna be free drinks and free food. so i got there and partyed my balls off. fell asleep when I woke up the next day every thing was gone and I was now in the desert.
she says well at least ur back alove and safe.

the end.



also if any of yall have any good poetry that u wrote Id love to here them.
Ill post more of my poetry if yall want. also there all different so... ya know.

[MrMcBean]

Boom boom BAP, WAS!, baboomboom BAP, THAT?... BOOM BOOM bap Bap bapbapbapbap...... even poetry?

[#1cheesebuds]

anyone else have any thoughts.

[TheGreenBastard]

Maybe you should,
Do a good deed,
Make it look good,
Easier to read,

Because that shit,
Is all over the place,
You should fix it,
You know, add some pace,

It just kind of goes,
You can't tell the highs from the lows,
Without the rows,
How long? Who knows?

You need to add some structure,
Put a comma or two,
It lacks that flowing luster,
That essential binding glue,

Put it into sections,
This will ensure interest protections,
People will be more willing to read,
If clarification has no need,

Listen to my heed,
Take the time to plant the seed,
And in future endeavors you will succeed,
For we are not all the patient breed,

Lacking the time to read you poem,
For you are the only one who knows'em,
It is just as important to have guiding lines,
As it is to find the proper rhythms.

[TheGreenBastard]

Originally Posted by MrMcBean

Boom boom BAP, WAS!, baboomboom BAP, THAT?... BOOM BOOM bap Bap bapbapbapbap...... even poetry?

I would write some more poetry
If it wasn't for all that damn peyote

[MrMcBean]

Originally Posted by TheGreenBastard

Maybe you should,
Do a good deed,
Make it look good,
Easier to read,

Because that shit,
Is all over the place,
You should fix it,
You know, add some pace,

It just kind of goes,
You can't tell the highs from the lows,
Without the rows,
How long? Who knows?

You need to add some structure,
Put a comma or two,
It lacks that flowing luster,
That essential binding glue,

Put it into sections,
This will ensure interest protections,
People will be more willing to read,
If clarification has no need,

Listen to my heed,
Take the time to plant the seed,
And in future endeavors you will succeed,
For we are not all the patient breed,

Lacking the time to read you poem,
For you are the only one who knows'em,
It is just as important to have guiding lines,
As it is to find the proper rhythms.

If you just made that up then thats the most insane thing ive seen on forums in a long time lmao

You basically said it all.. he needs to explain this.

[TheGreenBastard]

I've always been able to make shit like that up on the spot, it just comes to me.

Me and a friend once IM'ed each other for over an hour just rhyming off each other.

Can't rap for shit though, lol.

(I just can't wait to hear CheeseBud's response)

[#1cheesebuds]

Originally Posted by TheGreenBastard

Maybe you should,
Do a good deed,
Make it look good,
Easier to read,

Because that shit,
Is all over the place,
You should fix it,
You know, add some pace,

It just kind of goes,
You can't tell the highs from the lows,
Without the rows,
How long? Who knows?

You need to add some structure,
Put a comma or two,
It lacks that flowing luster,
That essential binding glue,

Put it into sections,
This will ensure interest protections,
People will be more willing to read,
If clarification has no need,

Listen to my heed,
Take the time to plant the seed,
And in future endeavors you will succeed,
For we are not all the patient breed,

Lacking the time to read you poem,
For you are the only one who knows'em,
It is just as important to have guiding lines,
As it is to find the proper rhythms.

that kicked ass. love it. good job.

[TheGreenBastard]

I was hoping you would, thanks man.

I was just bored as shit and wanted to check out this thread so posted first thing that popped in my mind......

Chapstick, Chapstick
there's a Ford Mavrick

Still got it....

[disfunktional]

4 eternity iv been a prisoner of war trapped in my own mind
life is the enemy iv fought, and shes been none to kind
the armor iv worn into battle is the anger that protects my pain
and the hate that iv carried are all the battle scars that remain
now im enjoying this new found freedom from all the controlling fear
life has underestimated me il not back down, no i will only perservere
as i slowly shed my armor i walk easier because slowly begin to believe
that when i let go of all my hate theres absolutely nothing i cant acheive

disfunktional